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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In the recent past, many people
think
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 that specialists must
work
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on
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in
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 their
training
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home
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country
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, but some
convince
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 that
it
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they
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 should be able to
work
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 in any
prefered
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preferred
country
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. In my opinion, i think
professionals
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 should not be limited to
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work
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in only
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only in
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 their training
country
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. If they can
work
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 anywhere they want,
It
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it
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 will be better for
some
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several reasons. On
thre
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the
 one hand,
that
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professionals
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 should benefit the
country
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 by
stay
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staying
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 and
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work
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working
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 in the same
country
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 where they were trained. Most
specialize
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specialised
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trainings
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training
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are
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 different
according to
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 the host
countries
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. Moving to
work
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 in other places may not suit
to
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the training they
were
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recived
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received
.
Moreover
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,
Countries
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'
government
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governments
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 often spend
budget
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their budget
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 on
professionals
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,
such
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 as
master
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master's
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 degree
student
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students
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, and as they can study for free, they are expected to help improve the
country
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 in the future.
On the other hand
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, others argue that it should be their
choices
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choice
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 to
work
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 in any
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countries
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country
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. They believe the
professionals
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 have their own reasons to
work
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 in the
country
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choosed
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chosen
. Some might want to learn from
others
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other
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countries
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 and bring the knowledge back to improve their
country
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. Some may find better career chances in different places. In fact, forcing someone to
work
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 in the
country
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 they
not
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 willing to might contribute more negative effects.
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, there are some chances of
professionals
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become
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becoming
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threat
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a threat
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 to the
country
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 as they are forced to
work
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 for
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country
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a country
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 they did not want to. With all these considerations, I
outweigh
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believe
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 the statement
says
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that
professionals
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 should
had
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have
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freedom
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the freedom
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 to choose to
work
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 in any
country
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 because
the
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of the
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varity
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variety
 of each specialist
reasons
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apply
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.
Therefor
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Therefore
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,
require
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requiring
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professionals
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 to
work
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 in only one
country
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 is not
the
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a
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 good idea.

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coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and spelling to improve clarity and professionalism.
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You present both views of the argument, which is important for a balanced discussion.
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Your opinion is clear, showing you have a clear stance on the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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