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Band 5

You are studying English at a private language school attended by many international students. You are planning a surprise birthday party for a friend who has been feeling particularly sad and homesick. Write to another classmate and invite him/her to the party. In your letter: explain the reason for the party give the date and time of the party suggest what the classmate could bring to the party

Dear Terrey, I hope you are doing well. I would like to share my plan
which
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, which
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 I have made for the surprise birthday
party
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 of Jason. First of all, as you know,
that
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apply
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his health conditions are not fit, he keeps himself entangled
into
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in
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 the room, where he feels
boredom
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 and
be
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apply
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sad. Thereby,
following
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the following
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 week there is
birth
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the birth
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 anniversary of Jason and we can organise a small
party
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,
dedicating
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dedicated
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 to him. The reason
to give
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for giving
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this
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party
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 is, in order to chase his mood positively. As his born anniversary is
on
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apply
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coming week
Saturday
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, Saturday
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,
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however
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however,
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 he
need
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needs
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 to spend time with his family
,
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.
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due to
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For
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this
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reason
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reason,
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 I have considered
to organise
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organising
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 on July 27th, 2025
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, initiating
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initiating
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starting
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 from 5:30PM, which might be more
convienient
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convenient
 for all
of
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apply
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attendee
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attendees
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. It would be
greatful
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great
 if you
can
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could
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 be a helping hand regarding
few
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a few
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item
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items
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during
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on
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 that day, in which cake, confetti, and the
party
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 poppers are to be brought from your end,
rest
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the rest
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 of
all
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the
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 things
is
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are
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 taken into my list. Please, arrive at
destination
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the destination
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 prior to 15 minutes
as
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, as
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 we can
finalize
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finalise
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 the decoration and feel free to contact
for
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us for
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choice
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the choice
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 of cake. See you soon. Warm regards, Ashun Patel

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to keep your ideas in the correct order. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and punctuation. Some sentences are a bit difficult to read because of mistakes.
task achievement
Be careful with spelling. Some words are misspelled, like 'convienient' and 'greatful.'
task achievement
You have a kind and friendly tone in the letter, which is nice for a birthday invitation.
task achievement
You clearly stated the reason for the party, which shows you are caring and thoughtful.
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