In many countries today,crime novels and tv crime dramas are becoming more and more popular why do you think that these books and tv shows are popular? what is your opinon of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

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matter is that many people lack
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excitement
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lives
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leads them to watch
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shows or read toecurling novels to revive
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excitement
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of these novels or shows have
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crime
documents
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has
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me the reality of the world and
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how the human mind works, how some people in the world view violence as a solution
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frankly
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it scares me to know that we live in
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a horrific world

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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to clearly introduce your main idea at the start of the essay. A strong introduction helps the reader follow your thoughts more easily.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to connect your ideas better. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'also', and 'in conclusion' to show how your ideas relate to each other.
Task Achievement
Include more examples to support your points. For instance, you could mention specific books or shows and how they affect viewers.
General
Check your spelling and grammar. Some words are misspelled, which makes it harder to understand your points. Take your time to proofread your writing.
Task Achievement
You have shared personal insights about how crime fiction has affected you, which adds a personal touch to your response.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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