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Band 3

The internet has become profoundly efficient and popular that people choose it as a platform to learn. Some believe that it would eventually replace the need for books. Do you agree or disagree?

In the present world , the
internet
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 is widely used by everyone ; it has replaced many things from our past. In that case, some agreed the
internet
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 will replace
books
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 seems to me like,
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 , analysing cost and storage difficulties ,
as well as
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convenient
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 for use and
environmentally friendly
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, will prove
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,cost of the
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 higher than e
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 its ebook is easy to bring anywhere rather we can't bring all the
book
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 once,
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, we can bring our laptop or mobile we can use the
internet
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 can read any
book
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 from anywhere
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 physical
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 need to be carefully stored on
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 racks or some other places on contrast e
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 no need to be stored its only want tiny place
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 computer table.
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, protecting the environment is a vital factor
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 the need for physical
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 requires more paper production, which will create chaos for the environment and create some main causes of forest management.
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, a thousand
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 need one hundred thousand paper , which requires cutting down more trees
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e-book
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 not have any environmental chaos its environmentally friendly
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 summarise, the
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 provides e-
books
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 is convenient for use, it is cost-effective,
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 over it is easy to bring anywhere and easy to learn anywhere than
books
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Clearly state your opinion in the introduction and support it with reasons.
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Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to improve logical flow.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points, making your arguments stronger.
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Add a conclusion that summarizes the main points and restates your opinion clearly.
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You have introduced the topic clearly and presented some good points.
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Your essay shows an understanding of the benefits of e-books.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • profoundly
  • efficient
  • platform
  • replace
  • online courses
  • resources
  • current
  • dynamic
  • engaging
  • diverse
  • accessible
  • multimedia
  • information retention
  • convenience
  • flexible
  • personalized
  • permanence
  • distractions
  • connection
  • digital reading fatigue
  • screen time
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