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Computers today can quickly and accurately translate languages; therefore, it is a waste to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that learning a new
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 is important.
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 it is a commonly held belief that
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 another
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 is a completely waste of time, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I disagree that learning a foreign
language
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 is unnecessary, because it is beneficial for our brain and life experiences.
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 with, translating by using
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 is not always practical.
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, computers can translate quickly, but not accurately.
In addition
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, idioms
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 as she is feeling blue, translate to she is actually blue.
Secondly
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, learning another
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 a unique life experience. It can open store to new opportunities.
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, a good job offer, companies can develop from
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 skill, it allows them to combine with foreign companies. Another point to consider is that develop skills, namely, learning a new
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 can help delay diseases,
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 as Alzheimer's and dementia. It is
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problem-solving skills and creativity.
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, learning a foreign
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 make you learn and think in
a new different ways
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.
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,
language
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 learners, often see problems from more than one angle. which helps them find unusual solutions. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that learning a foreign
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 is a major thing, because it develop our critical-thinking and communication skills.

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coherence and cohesion
Improve sentence structure for better clarity and flow. For example, revise sentences to ensure they are clear and grammatically correct.
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Provide more specific examples and develop your points further to strengthen your argument.
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The essay addresses the topic and states a clear opinion.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion summarizes the main points well and reinforces the writer's opinion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automatic translation
  • language acquisition
  • bilingual/multilingual
  • cultural immersion
  • contextual understanding
  • nuance
  • language proficiency
  • intercultural communication
  • linguistic skills
  • translation software
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