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Today more people are travelling than ever before.Why is this the cause? What are the the benefits of travelling for the travellers.

Today, more
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 are travelling than ever before.
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 increase and the advantages
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 gain from travelling abroad. One main reason is education. Many students want to study at top universities like Oxford or Harvard, which offer better programs and sometimes scholarships.
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, many countries don’t have high-quality universities, so students travel abroad for better learning opportunities. Another reason is curiosity.
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 want to explore different cultures, try new foods, and visit famous places they see on social media.
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, modern transportation has made travelling faster, cheaper, and more comfortable than in the past. Travelling
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 brings many benefits.
People
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 who visit other countries improve their communication and problem-solving skills. They become more confident and learn how to live in different environments.
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 experience helps them grow both personally and socially. In conclusion, more
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 travel today because it is easier and more useful than before.

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Make sure to clearly explain each point in separate paragraphs. This helps readers follow your ideas more easily.
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Add more specific examples to show how education and curiosity lead to travel. Examples strengthen your points.
coherence and cohesion
In your conclusion, you could summarize the main points more clearly and make a stronger final statement.
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You clearly state the increase in travel and its benefits, which is a strong start.
coherence and cohesion
You have a logical flow in your ideas about education and curiosity leading to travel.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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