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The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph gives information about the prices of
houses
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 in three countries, over a 17-year period from 1997 to 2014.
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, what stands out from the chart is that in all countries, the cost of
houses
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 experienced a gradual rise,
while
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 the
price
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 of
country
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 A was higher than other countries. Looking at the details, in 1997, the average house
price
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 started at about 240,000$ in
the
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country
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 A, which was followed by a significant growth to approximately 510,000$ in 2004.
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,
this
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 figure declined steadily to 510,000 in 2008. After that, it reached a peak at 750,000$. When it comes to the
price
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 of
houses
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 in
country
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 B showed a small increase from 235,000$ to 300,000$ between 1997 and 2004.
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, despite declining steeply to 250,000$ in 2008, the cost of
houses
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 rose to 500,000$ by the end of the year. In terms of the
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 of
houses
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 in
country
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 C,
initially
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, it was around 220,000$, after which, the figure grew slowly to 250,000$ in 2007. By 2008, it dropped to 210,000$. But, it returned to the back
price
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 of 250,000 in the final year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses, price, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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