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The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph illustrates
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the prices of houses during the period from 1997 and 2014 in three different countries , which are
country
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 A,
B
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, and C.
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, what stands out in the graph is that
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 A saw a dramatic upward trend,
while
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country
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B
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 experienced to hit a low point in the figure, which remained in a high
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position, except
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 C , which increased less than
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B
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. In 2004,
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country
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 A
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 approximately 550
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of
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dollars
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,
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in
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country
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B
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 had 300
thousand
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dollars
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. In 2014, both of them witnessed an increase in house prices,the A
country
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’s price showed 750
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of
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dollars
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 , which means the highest price among others, and in
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B
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country
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’s it was 500
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of
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dollars
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. The
country
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 C increased steadily from 1997 to 2007 , but in 2008 it had a significant decline
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 After that, it continued climbing until 255
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dollars
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 ,
then
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 fell slightly in the following years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country, b, thousand, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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