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The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period

The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period
The given tables show the changes in the total
population
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 of New York
City
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 and the populations of its five boroughs (
Manhattan
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,
Brooklyn
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,
Bronx
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,
Queens
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, and Staten Island) from 1800 to 2000.
Overall
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, the total
population
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 of New York
City
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 increased significantly during the two centuries. Most of
this
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 growth happened between 1800 and 1900, and after that, the
population
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 remained relatively stable. Among the five districts,
Brooklyn
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 and
Manhattan
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 had the highest populations in the early period,
while
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Queens
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 and the
Bronx
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 showed big increases later on. In 1800, the total
population
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 of the
city
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 was quite low, with
Manhattan
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 being the most populated area.
Brooklyn
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 was
also
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 growing fast, and by 1900, it had more people than
Manhattan
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. The
Bronx
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 and
Queens
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 had very small populations in the 1800s, but their numbers increased
a lot
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significantly
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 by 1900.
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, between 1900 and 2000, the
population
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 in
Manhattan
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 and
Brooklyn
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 slightly decreased,
while
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Queens
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 and Staten Island continued to grow. Staten Island always had the smallest number of people, but it showed a steady rise over the years. In short, New York
City
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 saw huge
population
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 growth between 1800 and 1900, especially in
Brooklyn
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 and
Manhattan
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 at
first,
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and
then
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 in
Queens
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 and the
Bronx
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. The
population
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 became more spread out among all five boroughs by the year 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, city, manhattan, brooklyn, bronx, queens with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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