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The pie chart below shows the percentage of ad spending by different kindsof media in Indiafrom 2012 to 2017.

The pie chart below shows the percentage of ad spending by different kindsof media in Indiafrom 2012 to 2017.
The graph revealed the interest spending on advertisements by several types of media in 20012 to 2017 in India.
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, TV was the biggest percentage in 2012 and
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kep
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kept
 the most spending in 2017 in India. The next biggest media was Print
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 it declined over
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time but kept
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 second place in 2017.
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, the other four
medias
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media
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 briefly decline to minimal
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levels
. In 2012, TV had nearly half ot the
overal
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overall
 spending
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this
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 kept increasing
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 45
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percent
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per cent
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 until 2017. The
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 biggest spending was Print with 38
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percent
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in 2012
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 it slightly
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 over the years with 30
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 in 2017. Cinema and Radio were the biggest losers
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in
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which
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cinema
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completely
disappered
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disappearing
and Radio
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 in 2017. Outdoor became the second least used with 5
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 and kept
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 spending
untill
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until
 2017. Despite
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Digital started
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 as a low percentage, 6.0, it reached
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15
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 in 2017 in India.

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