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Band 2.5

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

These
layout
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layouts
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 illustrate the spatial distribution of the facilities in the Grance
park
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 when it opened in 1920 and today.
Overall
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,
grange
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Grange Park
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park
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have
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 2 entrances
which
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, which
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 are located opposite and have no change throughout the time.The area of the
park
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 was the same in the two periods. In 1920,there was a fountain in the
center
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 of the
park
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,
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while
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 a stage for
the
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apply
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musicians next to it,
they
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which
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 occupied a large
space
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part
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 of the
park
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. A rose garden was between the north
entrance
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 and
pond
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the pond
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 for water plants,and a glasshouse was on the right side of
south
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the south
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entrance
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.In the northwest corner and southwest of the
park
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,there
where
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other two
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two other
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 rose gardens
around
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with two seats ,respectively. Currently，the distribution of the
park
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 has
significant
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undergone significant
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 changes.Only the rose garden in
northwest
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the northwest
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 corner
are
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is
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 in the original position .Another huge rose garden
are
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is
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 in the
center
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centre
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 which
surrounds
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with
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by
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 seats
instead
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 of the fountain in 1920.A water feature replaced the glasshouse ,with an
entrance
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of
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to
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underground
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the underground
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 car
park
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 behind it.In the west side
amphitheater
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amphitheatre
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 of
concert
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the concert
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have
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has
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 been built today.Children’s play area and a cafe are on the
right
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right-hand
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hand
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side
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 of
north
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the north
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entrance
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.

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structure
Give a clear view at start, then map by time. Use two or three short para to show 1920 and now. This helps reader see the big changes.
grammar
Fix big grammar issues. Check use of is/ are, was/ were, and where words. Keep sentences short and easy.
grammar
Name places in the park correctly and keep them same each time. Use the same spelling for Grange Park.
coherence
Group ideas in order. First the old plan, then the new one. Put links like and, but, next, then to show contrast.
lexical
Use simple but clear words to talk about changes. Stick to main idea and give clear details for a few items.
content
The essay gives many details about places in 1920 and today.
structure
There is an overview at the start to show the task.
task response
The idea of change from old to new is clear.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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