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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

The two maps illustrate the layout of Grange
Park
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 when it first opened in 1920 and how the
park
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 looks today.
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, the
park
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 has changed a lot. Many old things are gone, and new facilities are added, but some parts
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, like
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 rose gardens and
entrances
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entrances,
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 stay the same. In 1920, Grange
Park
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 featured three separate rose gardens.
One
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 was in the west,
one
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 in the northeast, and
one
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 in the southeast corner. In the centre stood a large fountain,
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 a stage for musicians occupied the left side and a glasshouse was positioned on the right. Seating areas were spread across the
park
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, and two entrances provided access.
One
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 entrance was on Arnold Avenue to the north and the other on Eldon Street to the south. There was
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 a small area for water plants near the northeast rose garden. Today, the central fountain has been removed and replaced with a new, enclosed rose garden surrounded by seats. The stage for musicians is now an amphitheatre for concerts, and the glasshouse has been converted into a café. The water plants area is now a children’s play area, with a water feature built below it. A new entrance linked to an underground car
park
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 has been added on the southeast side,
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 the original west and northeast rose gardens remain unchanged. In summary, the
park
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 has become more focused on leisure and entertainment, with traditional features replaced by modern amenities to cater to contemporary needs.

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accuracy
Check the facts about what exactly stayed the same and what changed, especially the rose gardens in the old map and today.
structure
Make a short start that says what the map shows, then two clear parts for old and new. End with one quick note.
coherence
Use small linking words to show time and contrast, like 'and', 'but', 'now', 'then', 'while'.
content
Clear overall view of change and good use of both time frames.
content
Many details about both old and new parts of the park.
structure
The writing is easy to read and flows well between ideas.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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