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Writing Samples
Band 2

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

The pictures depict the changes
about
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in
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the
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apply
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Grange
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park
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Park
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 between 1920 and today.
Overall
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,the area underwent
major
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 transformation,especially in terms of infrastructure. In 1920,there was a Fountain in the middle of the
PARK
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,
while
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 a Stage for musicians was located
in
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on
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 the left.Two Rose
garden
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gardens
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set
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are set
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 up
in
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on
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 each side of the left
park
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.
In addition
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,four seats were scattered around it.On the right side,a pond for water
plant
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plants
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built
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was built
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 upon the blank field and a
glass house
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glasshouse
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 was established at the bottom.
Compare
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 to the
1920
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1920s
,A big Rose garden
arounded
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surrounded
 by seats
instead
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 of the Fountain in the middle of the
park
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,
whereas
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 the stage for musicians has been removed and replaced by
a
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an
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 Amphitheatre for concerts. It was the
better
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best
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 place to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 the pubic
needing
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needs
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. In the right corner,
pond
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the pond
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 for water plants was replaced by a children's play area.
Children's
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Children
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 and parents would
more
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apply
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enjoyed
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enjoy
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 the
park
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and
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more and
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 wanted to
the
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visit the
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park
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 frequently.In the bottom right corner,
glass
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the glass
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 house was demolished,
while
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 a water feature became
to
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apply
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a
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an
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impressived
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impressive
 landscape.

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overall
Add a clear plan at the start and end with a short close. Give one big idea per paragraph and keep the link words simple.
grammar
Fix tense and form. Use simple past for 1920 changes and simple present or past for today.
structure
Be sure to tell what each place was and what it is now, in order from left to right.
cohesion
Use 'and' 'but' to join ideas so the text flows.
content
You list many facts about the park so the reader can see the change.
organization
You try to compare old and new and use details.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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