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Band 3

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

The
two
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picture
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pictures
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 illustrate
layout
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the layout
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 of the public
park
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when
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when it first opened and its current layout.
This
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park
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 has basically retained its original structure and has been changed with some modern improvements. In 1920,the
park
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 had
two
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 entrances located on its northern and southern sides,
which
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from which
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 people
can
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 enter
from
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Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street. The fountain was located in the middle of the
park
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, with direct access from the
two
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 entrances. There were
Three
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three
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 rose gardens. A Pond for water plants located in the east of the Rose
garden
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garden,
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 situated in
northeast
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. The other
two
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 gardens located in the northwest corner and southwest corner
was
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 surrounded by
two
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 seats. What is more, there was a Stage for musicians
is
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laid between those
two
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 parks. In
southeast
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the southeast
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 corner, there was a Glasshouse. Today, the
park
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 has experienced significant
modernization
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modernisation
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. The fountain
been
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has been
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 replaced with a new rose garden surrounded by seats in the central area. The northwest rose garden remains, but the stage has been converted into an Amphitheatre for concerts. The northeast and water plant pond, and glasshouse have been replaced by a café, a children’s play area, and a water feature.
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, an underground car
park
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 that has an entrance on the east side has been added. And the
two
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 original entrances are still in use.

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task
Talk about both old and new park in clear order. Do not mix ideas.
coherence
Use a line to link ideas, like first, next, now. It helps flow.
grammar
Check grammar: use has/has been and was/were correctly. For example, 'The fountain has been replaced'.
lexical
Use simple, common words. Try not to use big or new words.
content
Be exact with where things are (north side, east side) and keep the facts clear.
mechanics
Watch punctuation and spaces after comma; make new sentences with capital letters.
content
The essay shows both old and new looks of the park.
structure
There is a clear change in how space is used, like the stage to the amphitheatre.
organization
The idea is clear: the park keeps its base but adds new things.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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