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12. The chart below gives information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including the prediction of the future Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons

12. The chart below gives information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including the prediction of the future Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons
The chart shows the growth of urban
population
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 in certain parts of the world
including
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, including
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 the prediction of the future.
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, the percentage of
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population
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the population
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 of
Latin
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America
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 and
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Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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are
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is
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 the highest
and
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, and
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 the percentage of
Africa
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 is the lowest. In 1950, the rate of
population
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 in the whole world was the second highest in the chart at 30
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percent
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per cent
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 and in
Latin
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America
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/
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Caribbean
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Caribbean,
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 the figure was even higher at 41
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percent
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per cent
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. In 2000, the percentage of
Latin
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America
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/
Caribbean
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 was still the highest at 70
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percent
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per cent
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and
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, and
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 the statistics in the whole world
was
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were
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 slightly lower at 48
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percent
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per cent
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. In 2030, the figure in
Latin
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America
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/
Caribbean
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 is still the highest at 80
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percent
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per cent
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and
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, and
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 the second highest is still the second highest at 60
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percent
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per cent
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.
Africa
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 and Asia in the past have
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had the
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the
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a
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 rate of
population
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 really low
with
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, with
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Africa
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 at 11
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percent
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per cent
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 and Asia at 13
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percent
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per cent
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. In
2000
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2000,
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 both
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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2 regions rose
up
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to 39
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percent
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per cent
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equal
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, equal
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 to each other, but in 2030, it is expected that the
population
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 rate in
Africa
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 will go up to 51
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percent
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per cent
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 and in Asia, it will be a little higher than
Africa
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 at 56
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percent
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per cent
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, latin, america, caribbean, africa, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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