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The table below gives information about the amount of waste production in six different countries over a twenty-year period.

The table below gives information about the amount of waste production in six different countries over a twenty-year period.
The
table
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 below gives information about the amount of
waste
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production
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 in six different countries over a twenty-year period. The US has the highest
waste
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production
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 of
6
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the 6
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countries on the
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 ,
Ireland
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 has the lowest
waste
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and
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 Korea has the
reduction
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largest reduction
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 in
waste
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production
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 in Korea. In one side,
Ireland
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 , Poland and Portugal are three countries which have a million
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 in
waste
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production
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 , lower than 10 million and in 1990 ,
Ireland
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 had 0,6 and 5
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 , Poland had 4 and 6,6
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, Portugal had 2 and 5
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 , in 1990 ,
Ireland
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 had not index on the
table
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 , Poland had 5
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 and Portugal had 3
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. The
waste
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production
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 in the US is over 100
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,
even
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 up to almost 200
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 in 2000. Korea and Japan have
waste
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production
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 in the middle of
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table
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 over 20
tonnes
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 every year
but
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the
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Koreans
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Korea
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do
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 not have the index in the
table
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 in 1980
and
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 in 200 it decreased to 19
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.Japan is increasing year by year
starting
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 from 20
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 in
1980
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1980,
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 till the end
2000
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 is 53
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, waste, production, ireland, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 5 times.
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