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The charts below show the number of tourists to Australia from three countries in 1995 and 2005 and the types of travels between 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the number of tourists to Australia from three countries in 1995 and 2005 and the types of travels between 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrate the number of tourists to Australia from three countries in 1995 and 2005 and the types of
travels
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travel
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 in the same period.
Overall
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, tourists who went to Australia in each
countries
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country
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 all had
the
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fluctuations and staying at resorts was increasingly preferred by everyone.
To begin
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 with,
UK
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the UK
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 had 800000 in 1995 and was significantly increased to 1500000
which
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, which
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 was almost doubled in 2005
,
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.
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this
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 trend can
also
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 be seen in
US
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the US
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which
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, which
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was
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had
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 just 500000 in 1995
but
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, but
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this
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 figure
was
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increased tripled to 1500000
in
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by
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 the end of
this
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phase
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phases
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phases,
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that
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which
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 was equal to the UK figure.
Moreover
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, Japan started with a high number
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, which
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 was 1500000 in 1995
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, but
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 it
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significantly decreased to 1000000 in 2005.
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, the types of
travels
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travel
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was
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were
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 changed a lot during
this
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 stage, staying at resorts was slightly increased from 300000 in 1995 to 750000 in 2000, after that it still continued to increase to 1100000
in
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by
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 the end of the period.
In contrast
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, backpacking had a
significantly fluctuate
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which
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, which
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was
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started at about 1600000 at first and
was significantly
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increased
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 to 2400000 in 2000
but
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, but
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 it
was
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sharply decreased to just 1100000
which
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, which
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 was similar
with
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to
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 the figure
of
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for
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 staying at resorts
in
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at
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 the end of
this
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phases
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phase
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 4 times.
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