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2. The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014.

2. The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014.
The diagram shows the amount of donations given to six different types of charity by a particular company between 2012 and 2014.
Overall
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, in
2014
Punctuation problem
2014,
show examples
 the
donation
Fix the agreement mistake
donations
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has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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 gone up in most types compared to
in
Change preposition
apply
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2012 and 2013.
To begin
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 with, all types of charity went up in 2014 except for two categories
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 are education and environment. For the education in
2012
Add a comma
2012,
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 the company donated at the rate of 8 and
then
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 decreased to 6
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 in the
end
Punctuation problem
end,
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 has
risen
Wrong verb form
rose
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 up equal to the
rate
Correct word choice
same rate
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in
Change preposition
as in
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2012
Punctuation problem
2012,
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 at 8. For the environment, the company has given 8% in
2012
Punctuation problem
2012,
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 equal to education and
then
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 in 2013 it has gone down to 5
Use synonyms
percent
Use the right word
per cent
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and
Punctuation problem
, and
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then
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 in 2014 the
static
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status
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then
Linking Words
 increased to 7
Use synonyms
percent
Use the right word
per cent
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.
On the other hand
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, social welfare has been donated a lot at 22
Use synonyms
percent
Use the right word
per cent
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 and
then
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 reduced to 16
Use synonyms
percent
Use the right word
per cent
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 and
then
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 again has rocketed to 24
Use synonyms
percent
Use the right word
per cent
show examples
. The same thing happened to the other for health. The statistics are 6 in 2012, 7 in 2013 and 9 in 2014. So does in the wildlife, where the
statistic
Fix the agreement mistake
statistics
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is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 3,4,5
respectively
Punctuation problem
, respectively
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 and in the
arts
Punctuation problem
arts,
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 the statistics
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 3 in 2012 and 2013 and went up to 4 in 2014.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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