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Writing Samples
Band 4

some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all time and they think it is a waste of time to read any entertainments books. what is your opinion about this?

There is no
deying
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denying
 the fact that parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all
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time
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.
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is
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 commonly held
belife
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belief
 that they believe any
entertainments
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entertainment
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 books waste of
time
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 by reading ,there is
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 an argument that opposes it.
in
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 my opinion,
i
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 consider that people contribute to teaching their kids various books on different
topic
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topics
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 to improve themselves, acquire new
term
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terms
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 and
cocepts
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concepts
,
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 to have fun without getting bored.
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 with,
childs
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children
 change and develop when they
reads
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what they
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favorite
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favourite
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 stories and novels, and
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 cannot be
restriction
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 to the education part only,
nowthere
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there
 are many areas
availble
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available
 to assist them and encourage their love of reading
,
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in
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 other words, looking over in free
time
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 is very beneficial for everyone , especially youngsters. As long as
occupies
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it occupies
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 them about wasting
time
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 playing or sitting on devices, with
passage
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the passage
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 of
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time
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 they will understand that perusing is not a harmful thing, but they will enjoy it and prefer ,use it in both cases for enjoyment and understanding .
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in
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 addition, exploiting youth emptiness
one
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 of the most important things that mothers and fathers must do in the right way
,
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 there are more skills.
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 ,writing ,expression and drawing to discover and enhance their talents. Another point to consider , parents have a strong
affect
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effect
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 on their children , so it is significant to support them .
it
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 is
also
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 possible to say that providing curriculum and magazines,
moreover
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 , it is
facilitate eliminate
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facilitates eliminating
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 ignorance and
publish
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publishing
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 knowledge
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for
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, for
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 instance , the city is rising.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly state your main ideas in a simple way in each paragraph.
task achievement
Provide more examples to support your points, which will make your arguments stronger.
grammar and vocabulary
Check your spelling and grammar to improve the overall quality of your writing.
task achievement
You have good ideas about the importance of reading different types of books.
task achievement
You try to explain the benefits of reading for fun, which is a strong point.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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