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some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times, and they think it is a waste of time to read any entertainments books. what is your opinion about this?

There is no denying the fact that parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times.
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 held belief that they believe any entertainment books waste of
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion,
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 consider that people contribute to teaching their kids various books on different topics to improve themselves, acquire new terms and concepts,
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 to have fun without getting bored.
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 with, children change and develop when they read their favourite stories and novels, and
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 cannot be restricted to the education part only
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 there are many areas available to assist them and encourage their love of reading.
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, looking over in free
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 is very beneficial for everyone , especially youngsters. As long as it occupies them
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 playing or sitting on devices, with the passage of
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, they will understand that perusing is not a harmful thing, but they will enjoy it and prefer ,use it in both cases for enjoyment and understanding .
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, exploiting youth emptiness is one of the most important things that mothers and fathers must do in the right way
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 there are more skills.
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 ,writing ,expression and drawing to discover and enhance their talents. Another point to consider , parents have a strong effect on their children , so it is significant to support them . It is
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 , it is facilitates eliminating ignorance and publishing knowledge ,
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 , the city is rising.

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Make sure to have a clear introduction that presents your opinion directly.
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Use paragraphs for each main idea to improve clarity.
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Provide specific examples or experiences to support your points.
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Rewrite sentences for better grammar and clarity.
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You clearly present your opinion on the topic.
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You recognize the importance of reading for enjoyment.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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