Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.

Some believe that social
media
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has
bad
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a bad
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impact on people these days. They say using social
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apps
more
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for more
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than 2 hours is very harmful
on
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to
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our
brain
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. These will lead to wasting time and will not
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accomplish multiple
things
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. Meanwhile, others think that using social
media
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apps
make
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makes
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our life easier.
Firstly
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, I would argue that using social
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in our
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is paramount.
Due to
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similar
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, individuals can learn many new
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by using social
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apps like Instagram, TikTok, and YouTube. They can hear news about
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the world
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in
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Instagram because it provides news about what
happening
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in the world now. If you want to learn something or enhance your skills, you can go to YouTube and watch the videos. It will help a
lot
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.
For instance
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, my brother was struggling to study
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exam
then
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he watched YouTube videos. It helped him a
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to study for
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the exam
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and
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, and
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it became easier for him.
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, some individuals assume that using social
media
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is very
harm
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harmful
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to our
mind
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minds
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. They believe that being addicted to Facebook or Snapchat is
wasting
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a waste
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of time.
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, my father thinks scrolling on
social
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a social
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media
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app for
whole
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the whole
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day is self-harm for us. He said that they will miss a
lot
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of opportunities to gain new
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;
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,
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to meet new people. My father said being addicted to social
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will lead to being
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an introvert
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and
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not
how
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knowing how
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to deal with people in
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the right
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way.
To conclude
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, I believe that using social
media
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will help you a
lot
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in your life to accomplish many
things
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. You will
also
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know about what is happening in
world
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the world
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now.

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task response
Try to clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'to conclude' to connect your ideas better.
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Make sure to add more specific examples to support your points.
task achievement
Your opinion is clear and you give reasons for it.
relevant specific examples
You provide some interesting examples from your life.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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