Some people believe that governments should have access to people’s mobile phone call records and messages for safety reasons. Others believe that this information is private and should not be available without permission. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own

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government accessing people's mobile phone records and messages for safety reasons is a highly debated topic. Some people think that it is important for national security,

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others argue that it's an invasion of privacy and should not be allowed without permission.

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essay will discuss both sides before presenting my view.

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Jul 20, 2025

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coherence

Make sure to clearly outline your main points in each paragraph. This helps readers follow your argument better.

introduction

The introduction clearly sets up the topic and the essay's purpose.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

58 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

access
privacy
communication data
public safety
terrorist activities
serious crimes
monitoring
tracked
unauthorized access
fundamental human right
abuse of power
infringement
trust in governmental institutions
surveillance capabilities
government power
overreach
strict regulations
accountability measures
individual rights
potential misuse
swift interventions

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