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Some people think that local authorities should control where buildings can be constructed. Others think that everyone should be free to build where they like without permission. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

There is an ongoing debate over whether local authorities should control construction or individuals should be free to build wherever without permission. In the following
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 I will discuss both views,
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 represent my own opinion. On one hand, some believe that citizens must be free over their properties, and given the fact that if we expect
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 restrictive rules, poor people won't be able to build their homes easily and face red tape. And
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, they will lose shelter
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 high costs.
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, to maintain safety regulations and architectural standards, it is vital for the government to take necessary actions and
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 to avoid environmental damage. All in all,
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 it might get difficult for the impoverished community but to prevent great damages it is vital to regulate
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 rules to audit harmful constructions.

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task achievement
Your essay addresses the topic, but you need to provide more examples and details to support your ideas. This will make your argument stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the flow of your essay by linking your ideas more clearly. Use linking words, such as 'however,' 'in addition,' or 'for example.'
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion. This will help the reader understand your viewpoint better.
task achievement
You have addressed both sides of the argument, which is a good approach for the essay.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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