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Question Prompt Some people think the money spent on developing technology for space exploration is not justified. However, there are more beneficial ways to spend this money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
the
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modern life, the
money
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spend
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spent
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for
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on
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 exploring
the
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apply
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space
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 to update
the
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technology
is faced
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faces
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to
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apply
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many arguments because they want to use it for
another
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other
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 purposes
suitablely
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suitably
.
This
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 is a hot topic for
dicussing
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discussing
 with many positive
anf
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and
 negative opinions. I think I quite agree with
this
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 statement, despite
of
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the big contribution of the
beneficail
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benefits
 of
space
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exploration
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for
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to
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the
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world science.
The
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Space
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space
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exploration
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 helps us to know more about the
space
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 outside our planet, with many valuable explorations
such
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 as the new planet which is as same as the Earth or the explanation for the
extintion
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extinction
 of
Dinasours
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dinosaurs
.
Human
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Humans
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has
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have
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 found a lot of beautiful planets with fabulous appearances that we haven'
t
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 seen before.
Howerver
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However
, the amount of
money
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 for developing the
techonology
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technology
 for
space
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exploration
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 is extremely big. When we find
the
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a
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 new thing
form
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from
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space
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, that means we have to pay a big cost for the research. But,
human
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humans
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 still face
to
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apply
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many problems nowadays
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such
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, such
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 as
polutions
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pollution
,
endanger
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endangered
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 species
or
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and
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 the unstable of finance in country. All of these problems need
to have
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a lot of
money
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 to solve.
According to
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 the
biologic
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biologist
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, the
eviroment
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environment
 is warming day by day with many signals like
gobal
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global
 warming, climate change and
wildfire
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wildfires
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 because of the operation of
fatories
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factories
, vehicles or human
activies
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activities
 in daily life.
Goverments
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Governments
needs
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need
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 to spend
money
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 solving them immediately or our
accomodation
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accommodation
 will be worse in the future.
Besides
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, the income of local
people
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 in
very
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every
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 part of the country isn'
t
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 stable, the city has many rich
people
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but
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, but
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 the countryside
is
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still
have
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has
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 a
lots
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lot
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poor
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of poor
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people
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 who have to work hard
everday
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every
but
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day but
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 can'
t
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 pay for all costs
and
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, and
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 their
childrens
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children
 can'
t
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 go to school like
another
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other
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citixent
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city
 kids. They need to find a job and help their parents
for
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to make
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living
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a living
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. These are some main problems that the
goverment
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government
 should solve immediately to
mantain
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maintain
 the good living
condition
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conditions
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 for their
citizents
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citizens
. Generally,
People
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 respect the
achivemets
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achievements
 of the technology for
space
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exploration
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. But, there
still
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are still
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have
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many
issuses
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issues
 that the
goverment
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government
 needs to spend
money
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 to solve
them
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apply
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. So
that is
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 the reason why the cost must be justified.

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grammar
Make sure you use correct spelling for important words like 'pollution', 'extinction', 'environment', and 'government'.
structure
Try to organize your essay into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should have one main idea and supporting details.
cohesion
Use linking words such as 'firstly', 'however', and 'in conclusion' to make your ideas flow better.
task response
You show clear opinions on the topic, which is good for task achievement.
task response
You provide specific reasons why spending money on other issues is important.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • justified expenditure
  • technological advances
  • earthly concerns
  • telecommunications
  • environmental conservation
  • inspire innovation
  • diplomatic relationships
  • peaceful cooperation
  • long-term survival
  • colonization
  • commercial ventures
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