If a person is found to be under the influence of drugs or alcohol while driving, they should be banned from driving for life, whether they were involved in an accident or not. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that driving under the influence of drugs should lead to a total ban from driving regardless been involved in an accident or not.
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as strict penalties can be enforced and punishment.
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caught under the influence of alcohol should be charged for disobeying the
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a lot of money as
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fee.
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will reduce the amount of alcohol intake when driving as they will be afraid to be caught, and some cannot afford to pay the charges
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leads to unnecessary expenses.
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it reduces speed on the road and accidents as well.
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of Zimbabwe increased
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fee to all
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who drink
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while
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driving,
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cases have dropped to 20% from 75%.
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, the essay believes that it is best to apply strict rules on roads
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banning
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for life.
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, punishing those who go against the rules and regulations when it comes to driving is the best solution.
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, many individuals
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, but playing
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them does not solve anything. Police should punish them by letting them spend the night behind
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bars without
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blanket, so that they learn from their mistake.
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many residents in Bulawayo are scared of taking drugs if they know that they will be driving because of the bad experience they had after
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caught by
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applying these sorts of rules has
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how people behave when driving. In conclusion,
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it is believed that a total ban is the best way to deal with these cases,
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think that penalties and punishment are the best.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • under the influence
  • impaired judgment
  • reaction time
  • deterrent
  • recidivism
  • economic burden
  • moral responsibility
  • rehabilitation
  • strict penalties
  • public opinion
  • road safety
  • societal safety
  • strict measures
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