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The chart illustrates average co2 emissions

The chart illustrates average co2 emissions
The line graph illustrates the CO2 emissions in the
UK
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 ,
Sweden
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 , Italy , and Portugal between 1967 and 2007 .
Overall
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 , it's clear that Portugal and Italy witnessed a significant rise , unlike the
UK
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 and
Sweden
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 , which experienced a sharp decline during the period shown . Regarding 1967 and 1977 , all the countries experienced a soar except the
UK
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, which remained at the same level . To be more specific , Portugal went from about 1.8 to nearly 2.5 , Italy has a significant increase from 4.1 to approximately 6.3 , and
Sweden
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 went from 8 to around 10.2 .
In contrast
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 , the
UK
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 remain at the same level
near
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of
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 10.4 . In terms of the remaining period , Portugal goes up to reach the peak around 6 , Italy
also
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 complete its upward trend to 8 and holds steady after that .
In contrast
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 ,
Sweden
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 witnessed a sharp decrease to around 6 .
Finally
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, the
UK
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 fell to about 8.8 during the period shown .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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