Write a letter to a friend who just moved into a new house that you are sending a gift to. Include What the gift is Why you chose it How it will be delivered

Dear Gihan, How are you? It's been a
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, hasn't it?
Last
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time must have been at the annual sports meet. I hope everything's going great on your end.
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, congratulations on your new achievement, and I hope you moved smoothly to the new house. I want to know, I bought a gift for you to commemorate your new milestone and our friendship. It was a wooden handicraft elephant. I know you like elephants. When you have free time, you go to our national parks and spend time with these animals.
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, as we South Asians believe, elephants symbolise success, strength, and prestige, so I thought it would be a meaningful addition to your new home. I
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this
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for this
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gift to be delivered
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your new
house
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address through Amazon. So it will arrive next couple of days. Keep an eye out for a package with my name on it! If it
delivered
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, let me know and I will come next weekend to visit
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your
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place
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. Wishing a lot of success and enjoyment. Best regards, Gihan Niranga

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coherence cohesion
Try to clearly separate each idea into different paragraphs.
task achievement
Make sure to include all details of the gift and specifics about your friendship.
suitable writing tone
You have a nice friendly tone throughout the letter.
complete response
Your choice of gift is meaningful and shows deep thought.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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