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Band 3

Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lessen pressure on the world`s fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Global awareness is increasing regards environmental issues .
Moreover
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,
The
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 fuel prices
had
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have
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 been increasing
through
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over
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years
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the years
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and
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, and
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 some are arguing
about
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for
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further
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increment
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increments
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to lower rates of consumption and protect natural resources from being
faded
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. I do support
this
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 idea and expect
a
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good results to be reflected . Car owners will suffer from high fuel costs .
As most
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 of the consumers came from
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middle class with moderate incomes . The high prices will
effect
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affect
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 their expenses
causing
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 a shortage
on
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 covering the rest of
the
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their
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 life needs . So , people will think twice before buying a
petrol-depending
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petrol-dependent
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vehicles
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vehicle
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.
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 , they may consider owning electric cars or even using public
transports
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transport
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 as an affordable option . Regarding the second
most
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largest
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 user of oil sources , the
manufactories
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manufacturers
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, most of them already worry about paying salaries and
extra
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 load may lead to their bankruptcy .
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 , they will depend more on greener sources like wind and water power .
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,
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this
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 inflation may lead to some job loss and little economic drawbacks , the advantages are outweighed by these downsides .
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 , most of the environmental problems will be diminished
as a result
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 of rising Gas prices . I totally agree with
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 action in order to protect
the
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nature .

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and all sentences in that paragraph support it.
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Use clearer examples to support your points and explain how they relate to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Check the use of linking words (like 'however', 'moreover') to help guide the reader through your essay better.
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You have a strong opinion about the topic and you explain your agreement clearly.
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You mention different groups affected by fuel price increases, which adds depth to your response.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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