A friend of yours is going on holiday soon and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: recommend a good place for a holiday that you have visited describe where you stayed and what you can do there give one negative aspect about the destination (204)

Dear Nav, I hope you are doing well. I
recieved
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received
your letter yesterday. I am jubilant that you are going on holiday. I am happy that you asked me for
recommendation
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a recommendation
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, and I will suggest
you
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apply
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a good
place
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where I have been many times. You can plan your vacation to Squamish, a city of mountains. I believe
,
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apply
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It
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it
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will be a 4-5
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drive from your
place
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. For
stay
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a stay
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, you can book
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the Sunrise
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hotel. It is not only
convienent
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convenient
, but
cheaper
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also cheaper
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also
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. The hotel is located
nearby
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various tourist attractions. You can enjoy
See
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a See
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to Sky Gandola ride, and explore the beauty of nature from the mountains.
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, there are many heritage places you can visit
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apply
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and
fetch
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gain
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knowledge.
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, there is only
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thing
that
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I didn't like about the
place
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was
network
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the network
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issue. I faced many difficulties
to contact
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in contacting
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my family, and
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in posting
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photos of the surroundings. Except
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this
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for this
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, it is a wonderful
place
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to appreciate the creation of nature. I hope you have a great vacation there. Do not forget to write me a letter once you come back. Best wishes, Ash.

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task achievement
Try to expand more on your experiences to make the letter more engaging. For example, add some specific activities you did in Squamish.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use more connective words to improve the flow between your ideas, like 'firstly', 'for example', or 'in addition'.
coherence and cohesion
Check for spelling errors, like 'recieved' should be 'received' and 'convienent' should be 'convenient'.
task achievement
You have a friendly tone that makes the letter welcoming.
task achievement
Your recommendation is clear, and you explain the hotel well.
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