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The table below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.

The table below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.
The given chart shows how the data about the
beer
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 amount and
fruit
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juice
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 has changed per
person
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 per
year
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 in various
countries
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that people in all mentioned
countries
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 drink far more
beer
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 than
fruit
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juice
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, and Germany and Austria are two common nations that took place in the top five
countries
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 in both
beer
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 and
juice
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 drinking habits.
To begin
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 with, it is clear from the first list that
Irese
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Irish
 individuals drink 155
litres
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 per
person
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 per
year
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 (P/Y), which is nearly double in quantity of Finland,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, and the United States' usages per
person
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 in one
year
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. Germany and Austria are two other
countries
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 that positioned second and
third,
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with 119 and 106
litres
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 per
person
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 P/Y, respectively,
whereas
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,
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apply
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 all other
countries
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' residents , on average ,
also
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 consume just under 100
litres
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 of
beer
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 per
year
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 . In terms of
fruit
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juice
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, Canada topped the chart, consuming 52.6
litres
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 per
person
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 in one
year
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, and the United States is the second top country , whose residents , on average, have around 43
litres
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 of
juice
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 p/y per
person
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. In
this
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 chart, Sweden and New Zealand are the two nations that are not listed in the top ten in drinking
beer
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 but
fruit
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juice
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, with 35
litres
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 and 24
litres
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 per
person
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 in a single
year
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words beer, fruit, juice, person, year, countries, litres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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