You live with a roommate at university but you have trouble studying because of a problem related to your roommate. Write a letter to an administrator at your university and include: Who you are The problem What you suggest they do

Dear Sir, My name is Gihan Niranga Namal, student number is 965325 G. I am a 2nd-year student and staying at the Sunrise College hostel in
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205. I want to inform you that my roommate's (Bibin to Joseph) attitudes and behaviours are not good these days. These days, he is conducting some dinner parties with some of his friends in our
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they are drinking alcohol, and
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smoking in the
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.
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, he watches films
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making a huge noise until early mornings. These activities may distract me from focusing on my studies. I kindly request you to take the immediate actions for
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, and if you have any possibilities, give me a new
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or a roommate. Thank you for considering my concern. Please let me know any additional information that you need about
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matter. Yours faithfully, Gihan Niranga namal

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Try to give more details about how your roommate's behavior affects your studying. This can help strengthen your response.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has only one main idea to improve clarity. This will help in organizing your letter better.
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Consider using softer language in your request to make it more polite. This could help in getting a better response.
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You clearly stated who you are and where you live. This is important in a letter like this.
coherence and cohesion
You expressed your concerns clearly and politely asked for help.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation
  • residential advisor
  • disruptive
  • concentration
  • mediation
  • compliance
  • amicable
  • tenable
  • rectify
  • study habits
  • commons area
  • quiet hours
  • academic achievement
  • cohabitation
  • lifestyle conflict
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