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In many countries, teenagers are encouraged to do part-time jobs. What’s the situation like in your country? What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of doing part-time jobs?

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In
 many parts of the world,
teenagers
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 are encouraged to take up part-time
jobs
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 alongside their studies. In my country,
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,
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 trend is still relatively uncommon. Most
teenagers
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 here focus primarily on their education, with limited opportunities for part-time employment, particularly
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 cultural expectations and academic pressure. There are several advantages to allowing
teenagers
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 to work part-time.
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, it provides them with practical experience and teaches them valuable life skills
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 as time management, responsibility, and financial literacy.
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, a teenager working as a cashier learns how to deal with customers, manage money, and communicate effectively—skills that are not always taught in school.
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, part-time
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 can foster a sense of independence and help build confidence at an early age.
On the other hand
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, there are
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 notable drawbacks. Balancing work and studies can be challenging, especially for students preparing for important exams. If not managed properly, part-time
jobs
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 can lead to academic decline and increased stress levels.
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, in some cases,
teenagers
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 may be exploited by employers who take advantage of their lack of experience or awareness of
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 rights. In conclusion,
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 part-time
jobs
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 can offer numerous benefits to
teenagers
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 by preparing them for adulthood, they must be approached with caution. A healthy balance between work and education is crucial to ensure that students do not compromise their academic goals or
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 well-being

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task achievement
Elaborate on cultural reasons for limited part-time jobs.
coherence and cohesion
Use transition words to improve flow between paragraphs.
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Provide more specific examples of part-time jobs.
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Good introduction that sets the context.
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Clear conclusion summarizing the key points.

Word Count

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