In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be dri driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

In the forthcoming
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, all
vehicles
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, including commercial and non-commercial, will be
driverless
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and people may not sit
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the
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seats
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and may prefer to be just
passengers
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.
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I accept there are some negative impacts of these
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vehicles
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, I believe that
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would have
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impact on the way we travel. On the one hand, people have always seen a driver taking control of the vehicle
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passengers
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enjoy the ride.
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, drivers are not able to
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concentrate completely
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on driving these days
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numerous distractions. These distractions could be from personal distractions to
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common distraction in
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recent days, notifications and calls on
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cell phones.
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years
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, it has become more common for the
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also
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to be equally vigilant to ensure that the drivers are concentrating on driving. Data on
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in the past few
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from
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of
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would
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confirm that the
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are more common
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the concentration of
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drivers.
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,
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vehicles
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are being built to adhere to the rules of driving. Since these
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vehicles
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unlike
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, unlike
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humans
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are not distracted and follow the instructions to
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following the rules reduces the possibility of
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may not completely eradicate the risk of
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accidents
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with the current version
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software and hardware
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however
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,
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vehicles
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would become more safer option
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then
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than
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vehicles
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driven by
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humans
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. As companies enhance their
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vehicles
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upcoming
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the upcoming
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years
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,
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may
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lead to
vehicles
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getting safer and faster.
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, the benefits of
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vehicles
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would be
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as these
vehicles
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upgrade to become
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apply
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more
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to
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make the journey safer for the
passengers
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and eventually
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the
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travel time.
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passengers
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could use
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travel time by getting more productive or
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in leisure.

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You present a clear opinion on driverless vehicles and their impact.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless
  • vehicles
  • passengers
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • safety
  • accidents
  • human error
  • traffic
  • flow
  • congestion
  • time
  • work
  • relax
  • parking
  • space
  • job loss
  • transport
  • cybersecurity
  • hacking
  • technology
  • trust
  • resistance
  • adopting
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