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Online education is rapidly increasing in popularity. What are the advantages and disadvantages of online learning compared to in-class instruction?”

It is becoming more popular to see individuals
to
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apply
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favor
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favour
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 online training over face-to-face learning. I
knowledge
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 that there are drawbacks to
this
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 subject, but the benefits are more significant. Because
,
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 it offers convenience and costs less than typical learning. Many
empolyees
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employees
 look forward to
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 their qualifications and educational background to
enchance
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enhance
 their opportunities in future jobs, and don't want to attend regular classes
becuase
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because
 they are exhausted after work.
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, online
learing
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learning
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tends
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 to be more convenient for them.
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, more than half the population in
USA
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the USA
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 work 9 to 5 job,
if
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and if
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 they
might
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apply
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want to enhance their educational background with a
degree
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degree,
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that
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it
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 will not be possible without attending
a
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an
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 institution that offers online classes.
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,
this
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 can
also
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 benefit the
students
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students'
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flexible
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flexibility
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, as they can access course
materails
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materials
 and complete their
assignment
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assignments
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 at their own comfort and convenience. In some
countries
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countries,
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universities
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university
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 tuition fees have reached
all
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an
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time
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 high, and
this
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 affects certain people because they can not afford it.
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, in
UK
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the UK
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, attending a university can
costs
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cost
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 a minimum of 29 thousand
pound
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pounds
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 per
educational
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academic
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 year.
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, enrolling in
a
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an
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 online course
in
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at
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 the same university
can
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may cost 16 thousand
pound
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pounds
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 per educational year.
This
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 can be helpful for those who want to continue their education, but
doesn't
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don't
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 have the financial resources.
To conclude
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, in-class learning started to lose popularity, as students are directed towards online learning. I believe that online learning is more convenient, as it saves time, energy, and money.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states the advantages and disadvantages of online learning. You can improve it by mentioning both sides directly.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear linking words and phrases to connect your ideas better, like 'first,' 'on the other hand,' or 'for instance.' This will help your writing flow more smoothly.
task achievement
Check your spelling or grammar mistakes, and correct words like 'knowledge' to 'acknowledge,' 'empolyees' to 'employees,' and 'enhance' to 'enhance.' This will make your writing clearer.
task achievement
You provide relevant examples to support your points about convenience and cost, which helps your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion nicely summarizes your points and your belief in online learning's advantages.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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