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The table provide statistics on several major metro systems around the world.

The table provide statistics on several major metro systems around the world.
This
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 table gives a clear view of the information about some important metros in the
wole
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whole
 world
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, explaning
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explaning
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explaining
 the time it was
finisht
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finished
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, how long it is, and
carrying
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the carrying
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 capacity each
year
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.
Overall
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, it is visible that the most noticeable
in
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is in
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 London because
its
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of its
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 total Km .
Also
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, the Tokyo
metro
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 is noon for its carrying capacity per
year
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.
However
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,
Kyoto
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the Kyoto
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metro
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 remained the lowest in
evrey
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every
 thing ,but it is the newest
throghout
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throughout
 the given metros. In detail, London
haves
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has
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 the
older
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oldest
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metro
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 system
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, it
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it
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which
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 was completed in 1863 , it is the longest by 1100 Km ,and it
carry
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carries
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 over 500 million
person
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people
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 in one
year
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.
In addition
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, it is clearly seen that
Paris
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the Paris
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metro
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 system is olmoust the
huff
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apply
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shorter
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shortest
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than
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in
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 the
London
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world
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metro
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 and it can hold 850 million
pepole
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people
 a
year
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.
Furthermore
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,
pepole
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people
 often visit the
Takyo
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Tokyo
metro
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, thats
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thats
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that's
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 why it
have
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has
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 over 1400 million
visiter
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visitors
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 every
year
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. As shown, the newest
metro
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 system
in
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is
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located in Los Angeles it was opened
on
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in
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 2001 .

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, metro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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