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One of your friends in a foreign country is starting an import-export business, and he has asked you to recommend a product from your country to him. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, -Say what product you want to recommend to him – Tell him/her where he/she can get this product – Explain why you want to recommend this product

Dear Raman, I am jubilant to know that you are starting your new business of trade in Canada. I believe
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 it will be a good start to build your career. As you asked me for a recommendation of a popular product in my country, I want to suggest
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about
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Tote bags. Nowadays, these are very famous among young girls. I was noticing it since
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 week, the purchase of bags
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 increasing day by day. To buy it, you can contact any seller, but make sure to purchase
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 from small-scale industries. It will not only
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 you less, but you will
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 get a good quality as well. Buying it from any expensive brand will be
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 idea for a start-up
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business. The prominent reason behind
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 of
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handbags. I
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 discussed with a shopkeeper about
marketing
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 of
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 stuff, and he shared some good reviews about it. I hope my advice will work for you, and do not forget to give me
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feedback. Best wishes, Ash

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coherence and cohesion
Try to make clear paragraphs with one main idea.
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Make sure to explain the reasons more clearly.
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You used a friendly greeting and closing, which is great.
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You provided good reasons for your product choice.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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