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The chart shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (14.04.25)

The chart shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (14.04.25)
The graph shows changes in the
number
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 of incidents in 3 different areas of
crime
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 that happened in Newport city over a
9
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9-year
years
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period
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. The
number
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 of robbery and car theft crimes
are
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is
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 gradually
increasing
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increasing,
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 meanwhile the
number
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 of burglary incidents
dropped
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has dropped
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 rapidly. The rate of robbery
stays
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is
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 the lowest out of
3
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the 3
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areas of
crime
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. In 2003, the
number
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 of
burglary
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burglaries
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 in the city
were
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was
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 the highest at 3400 incidents, it
then
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 rose for a year and decreased rapidly over the next
4
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4-year
years
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period
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. It
then
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 fluctuated around 1480
in
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from
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 2008 to 2012
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apply
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period
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. The
number
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 of car
theft
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thefts
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is
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was
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 lower in 2003, at around 2800
cases
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,it rose
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then
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, then
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 quickly dropped over a
3
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3-year
years
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period
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. It increased steadily from 2006 and
hitted
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hit
 2700
cases
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 of
crime
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 in 2012. The lowest
number
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 of
cases
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 of
crime
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 in 2003
is
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was
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 robbery at 600
cases
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. It
raised
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rose
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 to 900 in
2005
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2005,
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then
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 fell gradually and
hitted
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hit
 the bottom of 500
cases
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 in 2008. After
that
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that,
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 it fluctuated around 600
cases
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 over 5
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years
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5-year
period
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, crime, years, period, cases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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