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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be dri driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Due to
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technology
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technology,
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 it could be
predictable
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 that
,
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 all
cars
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 will
driverless
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be driverless
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 in the future. I opine that
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this
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 scenario has more cons than
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pros. On one side , there are some advantages of automatic
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cars
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cars,
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 like
people
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 can use their driving time to
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do other
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 important things to do
like
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as
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 doing online work
while
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 travelling in the
cars
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 .
Secondly
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, most of the driverless car companies are making
eco- friendly
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 vehicles.
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 Tesla is making electric
cars
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, a good alternative
of
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 petrol and diesel
cars
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 . It will create a positive impact on our environment because pollution
being
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will be
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 reduced by many times .
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 , no need to focus on one's driving skills through
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this
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these
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 innovative
cars
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everyone
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; everyone
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 can enjoy the journey of a private vehicle .
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side
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, there are several disadvantages of
this
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 new invention. First thing is the risk , even after proper
testing
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testing,
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 automatic
cars
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 still have risk and less safety. Second thing it reduces the job opportunities for
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poor
people
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 because
there
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their
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 one source of income is
to drive
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cars
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 for rich
people
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.
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 , for some
people
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driving
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, driving
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 is a fun and passion
that is
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 why they definitely do not like these automated
cars
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 .
Last
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 but not
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least ,
driver less
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driverless
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cars
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 are so expensive and
not
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do not
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having
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have
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 a huge variety. Everyone cannot afford these
cars
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 for themselves and their families. In conclusion, it is better if
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cars
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 have both types of
cars
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automatic
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, automatic
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 and manual , so that
people
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 can choose
according to
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 their preferences and demand .

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to structure your essay with clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
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Add more specific examples to support your points. This will help clarify your arguments.
language use
Try to use clearer language and correct small grammar mistakes to improve your writing.
task achievement
You clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
task achievement
You addressed both advantages and disadvantages of driverless cars. This shows good understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless
  • vehicles
  • passengers
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • safety
  • accidents
  • human error
  • traffic
  • flow
  • congestion
  • time
  • work
  • relax
  • parking
  • space
  • job loss
  • transport
  • cybersecurity
  • hacking
  • technology
  • trust
  • resistance
  • adopting
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