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The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The presented graph illustrates the comparison of
clothes
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were
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 exported in Colombia,Japan,and
Myanmar
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 over a period of 4 years from 1999 to 2003, with the figures measured in million dollars.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of clothing exports experienced a significant fluctuation in three countries.
the
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The
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 figures for Colombia and
Myanmar
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 witnessed an upward trend,
while
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 the opposite trend was true in Japan. In terms of
Myanmar
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,the proportion of
clothes
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 witnessed a substantial growth between 1999 and
2001
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2001,
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 from 0 to over 900 million dollars.
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,there was a downward trend in the
number
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 of exported
clothes
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 for 1 year.After falling remarkably from 2001 until 2002,the clothing rate in
Myanmar
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 increased slightly
about
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by about
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 160
millions
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million
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 over the 1-year period between 2002 and 2003.
Rewarding
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Despite the decline in
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 the
number
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 of exported
clothes
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 in Japan,expenditure on clothing went down steadily from approximately 590 units to 500 units between 1999 and 2000.After,the
number
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 of
clothes
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 climbed slightly to about 50
millions
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million
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 over the 1-year period from 200 to 2001 before dropping moderately in the following year.Concerning the rate of clothing usage in Colombia,there was a sharp increase from 450 to 700 millions of dollar between 1999 and 2002.By 2003,the
number
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 of clothing
continued
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items continued
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 witnessing a slight decline
about
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of about
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Vocabulary: Replace the words clothes, myanmar, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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