Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

Humanity is always striving to find ways in order improve, adapt or overcome problems. In my opinion, through
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has humanity
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advanced so far in a matter of centuries. Animal testing has enabled
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and researchers alike the ability to safely experiment
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inventions, without the fear of sacrificing human life. Animal testing can be justified because of the paramount benefits it has brought to humanity. For
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animals
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been used in important scientific research, both medical and social. In
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, a myriad of important medical discoveries
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immediate result of animal experimentation. Namely, the discovery
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small pox
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vaccine was only achievable
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cows possessing a natural precursor of the smallpox vaccine within their blood. When fighting against pathogens, the aforementioned discovery
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the framework of what the pharmaceutical and medical industry is capable of accomplishing today. Without it, society as we know
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may have been completely different.
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the clear reason as to why animal testing is justified.
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, many argue that experimentation on
animals
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cannot be justified. Often, because
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are
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living beings, like you and I.
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, humans do not have the moral right to do
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on
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, researchers can try to utilise alternative methods of research.
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, many
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regarding new vaccinations are carried out directly
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humans. These individuals provide their consent to
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and are often rewarded generously if the
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prove to be successful. Directly testing on
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subjects is one substantial advantage over animal testing.
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industries do so outside the pharmaceutical industry, its advantage is slowly being recognised. In conclusion,
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human testing can be employed, it should be done so with much care and control. One should not ignore the significant progress that animal testing has brought to society.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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