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The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010.
The graph compares the yearly income of three different bakeries in London between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, Bernie's Buns and Robbie's
Bakery
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 experienced an upward trend,
while
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 Lovely
Loaves
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 declined over the measured
years
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.
Additionally
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, Lovely
Loaves
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 had the highest
earnings
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 at the beginning, but ended up at the lowest. In terms of Robbie's
Bakery
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's
earnings
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, it
initially
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 had the second-highest income (about $60,000), plateauing over the next five
years
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. It rose significantly, surpassing the Lovely
Loaves
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 in 2006, reaching its apex at over $100,000 annually. Bernie's Buns started with $20,000 in 2000 and saw an increase to almost $40,000 in 2003. Its
earnings
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 stayed relatively unchanged over the next four
years
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 before peaking at over 60,000 in 2010. Despite the oscillations, Lovely
Loaves
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 consistently had the highest
earnings
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 until 2005, at over $60,000. It was overtaken by Robbie's
Bakery
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 and Bernie's
Bakery
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 in 2006 and 2007, respectively, declining to $40,000 in 2008, and
then
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 remained steady for the next three
years
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bakery, loaves, years, earnings with synonyms.
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