the charts below show search engines in ownership of electrical appliances in amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 2020 in 2019 summarize serve information by selecting and reporting the main features and make competitions where 11th

the charts below show search engines in ownership of electrical appliances in amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 2020 in 2019 summarize serve information by selecting and reporting the main features and make competitions where 11th
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the charts below show search engines in ownership of electrical appliances in amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 2020 in 2019 summarize serve information by selecting and reporting the main features and make competitions where 11th
The line graphs illustrate changes in ownership of the washing machine, refrigerator,
vacuum
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and vacuum
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cleaner in percentages and time spent in number of hours for housework per week in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, the upward trend has been observed over the years for buying electronic appliances at
home
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home,
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as it makes tasks easier for people.
Firstly
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and vacuum cleaners are in every house from 2000 to 2019 as they are basic and mandatory tools.
Secondly
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, for the washing
machine
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machine,
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there were some fluctuations observed as ownership increased until 1960 and
then
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decreased slightly in 1080.
Moreover
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,
Refrigerator
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refrigerators
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was
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were
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not in use by citizens before 1920 and steadily climbed over
the
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apply
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time;
reached
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they reached
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it
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their
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peaked
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peak
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about
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of about
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100
percent
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per cent
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in 1980 and remained stable.
Furthermore
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,
ownerships
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ownership
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for
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of
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vacuum cleaners climbed considerably
like
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, like
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refrigerators.
Additionally
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, as
number
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the number
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of gadgets
rose
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rose,
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the number of hours per week
spending
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spent
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on work dropped; from just over 45 in 1920 to less than 20 in 2019.

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