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The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by four types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.

The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by four types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.
The bar chart demonstrates the number of
humen
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humans
 who were affected by the
noise
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 in the city during the time period in 2007
Overall
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, the chart displays the quadrant types of the sound pollution
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such
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, such
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 as traffic,train,aircraft and industry.
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, the
gragh
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graph
 shows that the
amount
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number
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 of
the
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apply
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people
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 who
touched
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are affected
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 by environmental
noise
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 in the dark night of the day is rapidly
increased
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increasing
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.
Adittionally
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,the most unwanted sound is the traffic
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then
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, then
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 the train and the difference between them
approximately
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is approximately
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 50%precent of the
people
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 in
this
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enourmus
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enormous
 planet.
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,the industry and the Airlines are
the
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apply
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less common excessive
noise
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.
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,from one to five millions
of
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apply
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people
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 are
be
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apply
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ungrateful of
this
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noise
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which
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, which
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 lead
people
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be
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to be
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 ungrateful
to
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of
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 the
noise
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 in the city

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noise, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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