Tourism is a modern form of colonialism. It distorts local economies, causes environmental damage, ruins the places it exploits. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, a new concept of colonialism has appeared, and it's called tourism.

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it contributes to the destruction of the local business, it's

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damaging the areas that have been used since colonialism.

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, I personally don't agree with

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opinion, since tourism refers to another term entirely of colonialism.

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not mentioning that it can serve as a new source of income without forcing anyone to

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, as it's a good way to learn about different cultures. Whatever, I will examine the topic in

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and prove my point

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Jul 26, 2025

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Make sure to clearly explain your main ideas and how they support your opinion.

coherence

Organize your ideas into clear paragraphs, each with a main point.

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Use examples to support your ideas, and explain how they relate to tourism.

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Your essay presents a clear personal opinion on the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

90 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

exploitation
cultural overshadowing
monoculture
traditional livelihoods
fluctuating tourism industry
environmental degradation
natural resources
ecosystems
infrastructure development
loss of authenticity
commodification
sustainable tourism
ethical practices
economic benefits
cultural exchange

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