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The chart below gives information about the production of grains, measured in million metric tons, from the years 2015 to 2035. Production of Grains (2015–2035) Grain Wheat Barley Maize RiceThe quantities shown are in million metric tons.

The chart below gives information about the production of grains, measured in million metric tons, from the years 2015 to 2035. Production of Grains (2015–2035) Grain Wheat Barley Maize RiceThe quantities shown are in million metric tons.
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illustrated
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 the amount of grains
that
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produced by a country from 2010 to 2030
and
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 it is shown in
million
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meteric
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metric
tons
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unit
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apply
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.
Overall
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,
The
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the
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 highest quantities between all grains are the
wheat
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 from 2010 until 2030.
while
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 the lowest product is
the
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rice.
It is clear that
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wheat
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 and barley showed the
opimal
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optimal
 results among all the other food supplies.
In addition
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,
wheat
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recored
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recorded
 a steady
increase
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by
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 2 to 5
million
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 metric
tons
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 every 5
year
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years
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.
whereas
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, the barley recorded a massive growth every 5 years by 10 to 20
million
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meteric
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metric
tons
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 to reach the 50 % growth in 2030.
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on
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 the other hand,
rise
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rice
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 and maize faced a slow
increase
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 in production
compare
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compared
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 to
the
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wheat
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 and barley. Maize production increased only by 1
million
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tons
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 between the period 2010 to 2030.
Moreover
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,
rise
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rice
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 supplies recorded a shortage in 2015 by 0.4
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then
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 a steady
increase
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 to reach 25.5 in
2030
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2030,
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 with
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increase
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an increase
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by
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of
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 4%

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tons, wheat, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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