Today, more and more tourists re visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places.

Nowadays, people are
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interested
in places that are not available for regular tourists. There are many upsides and downsides
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it. One of the advantages of travelling
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a place where the hardest
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to arrive them. It is
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advantageous
for people who like
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to discover
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new land as a hobby.
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, trying new ways
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them to be
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healthier
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. If they want to travel to
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the Sahara
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desert, they must learn how to cope with the high
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temperature
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.
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, they may suffer
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the
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lack of water.
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, there is an obligation to
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physically
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and
mentally
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well-being. It is crucial that they work out regularly to be ready for
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travel
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.
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, the drawbacks should not
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ovelooked
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overlooked
. Travelling to the
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dangerous
places is
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high risk of
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because there are many unpredictable conditions that they cannot imagine.
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, animals,
such
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snacks
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reside in these places.
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they are sightseeing, they may be
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by them.
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, most of the
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, they have to deal with death on
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roads, but they overcome any obstacles. So, it is the most enjoyable journey for them.
there
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are many
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for
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in
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kind of situation.
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,
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are many pros and cons that show us how it can be enjoyable or harmful
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to the best of my knowledge, it is the best way to travel these parts of the world and figure out what
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our
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.
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