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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people think that robots are important for human's development. Other's think that robots have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 citizens say for proper
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enhancement
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man made
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important
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 others
beleives
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believe
 it is totally a disaster for
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the community
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. I strongly opine that
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robats
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robots
 are
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a totally
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 negative outcome for everyone. My essay will discuss both statements in detail. To
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 with, individuals state that
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robats
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robots
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 time management.
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, in court one is trying hard to write on paper
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obstracle
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obstacle
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 using computers or laptops
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 to type
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 a time period .
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 it is a great source
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security
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 previously people
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folder
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 for their
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documentation
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 now they save all their data on their mobile phones or
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.
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, in many
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 technology is becoming successful.
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,
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left-handed
 folks trusted that
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robats
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right-handed folks
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 are coming with
life changing
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 disadvantages like malfunction
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environment
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nowadays
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 hacking is taking place
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outcomes
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 in many families
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 leaking their personal photos, videos and using their credit cards
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is resulting
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 depression in many. In conclusion,
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a debate
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on
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 two sides in which some
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advocate
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 the various uses of technology in daily
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life
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while
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 others say high use of it
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concerns
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about
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; however
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however
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however,
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 it leads to serious
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so
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not to be
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 fully dependent on
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robats
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robots
 are better

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task achievement
Your thesis statement should clearly present both views and your opinion to the reader, making it easier to follow your argument.
coherence cohesion
Try to organize your essay into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should have a main idea and support it with examples. This will improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Watch for spelling errors (e.g., 'robats' should be 'robots' and 'inhancement' should be 'enhancement'). These can distract the reader.
coherence cohesion
Improve sentence structure to make your writing clearer. For example, instead of 'lefted folks trusted', you might say 'some people believe'.
task achievement
You have made a good attempt to discuss both views on the topic, which is important for this type of essay.
task achievement
You provided specific examples, such as document security and hacking, which are relevant to your discussion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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