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The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.
The bar chart illustrates the average number of
trips
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 made by children using different modes of transport in one country in 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, in 1990, walking was the most common way for children to travel to and from school,
whereas
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 by 2010, travelling by car had become the most popular mode. Most other transport types,
such
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 as walking, cycling, and taking the
bus
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, saw a significant decline in
use
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 over the 20-year period. In 1990, walking accounted for the highest number of
trips
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, at around 12
million
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. Cycling and taking the
bus
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 were
also
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 widely used, with each making up approximately 6 to 7
million
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trips
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.
In contrast
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, travelling by car and taxi was far less common, with fewer than 4
million
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trips
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 made using these methods. By 2010, the number of car journeys had increased dramatically to around 11
million
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, surpassing all other forms of transport. Meanwhile, walking, cycling, and
bus
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use
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 declined considerably, with walking dropping to 6
million
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trips
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,
bus
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use
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 to 3
million
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, and cycling to around 2
million
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. Taxi
use
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 remained low and relatively unchanged.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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