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modern lifestyles have led to an increase in stress levels among people. what are the causes and effects of this issue?

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Introduction
Most people
nowdays
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 have the same day routine that they always do day after day.Having a variety
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the
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activities and duties you do
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should make your daily routine fun and unboring.
Body · 1
The current time that we live in is very different
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 the past in many ways.
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communities
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, communities
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 have a big issue
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with
 the
phsycological
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psychological
 health status, and the most common problem is stress.
Body · 2
Stress can
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 not only your life, but it can
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 your family,friends and everyone around you.The lack of friendships is the biggest
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of
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 stress.Another cause is
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Conclusion
,you
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You
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 should pick
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 job carefully because if your job is boring and you hate doing it, it will be a big problem

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the organization of your ideas. Each paragraph should have a clear purpose. Start with an introduction, followed by explained causes, effects, and a conclusion.
task achievement
Add more specific examples to support your points about stress causes and effects. Examples could help to make your arguments stronger.
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You have identified stress as a major issue in modern life, which is relevant to the topic.
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Your essay shows awareness of how stress can affect not just individuals, but also those around them.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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