Some people think that professionals such as doctors or engineers should be required to work in their home country. Others think that they should be free to work in another country. Discuss both views and give your opinion

It is true to say that some individuals argue that highly educated
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like doctors or engineers should serve their professions in their
homeland
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homeland,
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while
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others believe there should not be any
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restriction
for working in other countries. I believe both views have
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the right
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points.
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, each person should have a chance to move and do their
professions
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profession
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in another
country
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. It is undeniable that there is a variety of
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differences
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in
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education
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the education
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system between
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apply
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each
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.
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fact
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leads
to vocational
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diferences
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differences
as well.
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, the feasibility of working areas
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require
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high
education
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according to
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curriculum of the
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become a new concern
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for
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some
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. In
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addition
,
majority
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the majority
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of them
believes
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believe
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that in return for
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education
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,
people
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should work and be beneficial in their home
country
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.
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, I believe
education
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should be given unconditionally
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, and
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people
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have a right to choose the
country
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to be served.
On the other hand
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, others believe every individual can do their
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job
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in other countries. If there are some
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differences
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caused by
education
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,
this
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gap may be closed by some additional
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training
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.
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, highly demanding careers
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as engineers and doctors aim to be beneficial for
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humans
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without any
posivite
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positive
discrimination towards
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apply
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their home
contries
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countries
. So, I believe they have
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right to choose the
country
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they
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where they
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will work. In conclusion,
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there are opposite ideas on
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matter and both views have strong arguments, each individual should have
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freedom to
give
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make
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their own decision
for
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about
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the place
they
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where they
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begin
to do
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apply
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their
professions
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profession
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.

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