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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Recently, some people started taking a
year
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 break before
countinuing
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continuing
 their future studies. The benefit of taking a
year
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 off is gaining work experience and
to earn
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earning
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 money during the gap
year
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. The main drawback
losing
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 their academic performance. One advantage of taking a break before attending a university is saving money.
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 is because many students find themselves overwhelmed in certain times as tuition in some countries
are
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 becoming more expensive.
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,
If
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 students did not work during the gap
year
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, they could not afford
attending
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 a university. In
addtion
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addition
, working might help to develop certain soft skills
such
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 as responsibility, time management, and communication. These skills are important for applying to future jobs after graduating.
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, in some sectors in Saudi Arabia,
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 skills are a minimum requirement
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 being accepted. One primary disadvantage students may find it difficult to readjust to academic routines, which can have
negative
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a negative
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 impact on their performance levels during their first
studying
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year
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 at the university.
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, many individuals in
USA
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the USA
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 take a gap
year
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 to travel and experience new cultures. Most of them struggle in the early stages to adjust to the demands and the environment of the universities.
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 is because the habits of regular studying, meeting deadlines, and concentrating in lectures
is
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 harder to rebuild after
long
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a long
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 break. In conclusion, taking a
year
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 off after finishing high school
started
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has started
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 to gain popularity among individuals. I believe that the benefits
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such
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, such
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 as earning money and work
experience
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experience,
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 outweigh the disadvantages.

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task achievement
Your introduction should clearly state both advantages and disadvantages of taking a year off. Try to capture the readers' attention with a stronger opening statement.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea. Use linking words to connect your ideas and improve the flow of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Be careful with grammar and spelling. Check for mistakes that can distract readers, like 'countinuing', 'in addtion', and 'impact on their performance levels'.
task achievement
You provided clear examples, like the importance of soft skills in the job market. This helps support your points well.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • work experience
  • internships
  • traveling
  • life experiences
  • personal development
  • independent
  • self-reliant
  • educational progress
  • graduation timeline
  • financial burden
  • academic momentum
  • structured academic environment
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