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Band 4.5

Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetable to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea but some oppose it. discuss both views and give your opinion.

Various modes of
transports
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transport
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 are introduced in
new
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the new
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generation
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generation,
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 from which some are taken for transporting imports and exports of
fruits
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 and vegetables. There are different
pruspection
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perspectives
 of every individual
like
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, like
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few
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some
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 say it is
possitive
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positive
while
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other
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others
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 mark it as negative development. I strongly opine that
suppling
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supplying
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 goods to different
countries
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even
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, even
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there
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though there
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 are some who are not capable of growing
such
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 veggies and
fruits
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 are best way of introducing them
every
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to every
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 flavour of
world
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the world
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. My essay will elaborate
each
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on each
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 view in detail.
To begin
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 with,
airoplanes
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aeroplanes
 discover the smooth way of transporting
fruits
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 and vegetables to many areas
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such
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, such
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 as lands
who
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that
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 are not capable of growing anything.
For example
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, there are some areas where
water
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the water
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 level is below the average
which
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, which
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 makes
hard
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it hard
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 to produce goodies there
like
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, like
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 in
2019
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a 2019
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 survey
had
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apply
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published in
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India
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india
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india,
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where
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which
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it
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apply
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states that
due to
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increasing
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the increasing
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 temperature of
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the earth
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earth
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Earth
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,
water
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the water
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 level in
rajasthan
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Rajasthan
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becomes
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has
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 at
their
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its
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 end.
Moreover
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, low temperature
countries
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are
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apply
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also
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having
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apply
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benefits
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benefit
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 from
this
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 scheme
such
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 as
due to
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wheather
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weather
conditions
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conditions,
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 they are not able to eat seasonal veggies
via
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; via
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this
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this,
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 they can easily consume all nutritional values without any
obstracle
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obstacle
.
In contrast
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, few citizens are in
depate
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dispute
 with
statement
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the statement
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 for not selling them out of their country because it has been noticed that there is
not
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no
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satisfied
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satisfactory
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 income is exporting their hardly grown
veggeis
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vegetables
.
However
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, some
time
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times
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 folks living in
there
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their
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 own place are not even
relaye
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reliant
 on having
such
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 rich in nutrition and vitamins goods.
Although
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,
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apply
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 after exporting good quality to other lands,
country
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the country
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trhem self
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itself
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having
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has
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 leftover
fruits
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which
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, which
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 creates a topic to
depate
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debate
 for many.
Never the less
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Nevertheless
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, planes are not affordable for some
low budget
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low-budget
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countries
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countries,
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 for which they use ships , buses and trucks
which
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, which
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supports
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support
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 their budget. In conclusion, every path has two
side
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sides
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from
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of
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 which
some
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apply
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are in
there
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apply
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support
or
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and
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other
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others
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 are in
disagree
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disagreement
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 state just
like
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as
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few
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some
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are agreed
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agree
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 to transporting goods via planes
or
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, or
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 some not
agreed
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apply
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.
Whereas
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 planes are the best way of
suppling
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supplying
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thing
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things
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 to different cities and
countries
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure your paragraphs have clear main points and stay focused on them.
task achievement
In the introduction, clearly outline both views before stating your opinion.
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Use more specific examples to support your arguments, which will strengthen your points.
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You provided a clear opinion in your essay, which is important for IELTS.
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The discussion of both views shows an understanding of the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consistent supply
  • harsh climates
  • nutritional value
  • perishable goods
  • carbon emissions
  • global climate change
  • economic ties
  • surplus countries
  • unsustainable agricultural practices
  • local agriculture industries
  • biodiversity
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