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some countries are struggling with increase in crime rates. some belive that having more police on the street is best way to reduce and combat ctime. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

The problem of increasing crime rates is a very
actual
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topical
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theme
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issue
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 in a lot of countries. I live in Milan, Italy
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nowdays
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nowadays
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 the number of crimes in my city is
growin
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growing
 year
per
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by
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 year. I strongly agree that having more police on the street is the best solution to reduce and
combar
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combat
 crime.
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 here in
Italy
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Italy,
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 there are a lot of debates because of the lack of police on the streets during the night. All the guys that come back home late and walk on the street feel a sense of fear and feel themselves in
dangerouse
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danger
, especially women. Here in Milan are always more frequent
event
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events
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 where taxi drivers have to chase someone who,
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steal
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steals
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 the purse
to
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from
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 her client who is getting
im to
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into
 the car. If you have more police on the street,
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example
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 it would be easier to identify and stop the criminal
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that
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who
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 is running away and
is
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apply
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trying to hide.

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language
Make sure to use correct words, like 'combat' not 'combar' and 'dangerous' not 'dangerouse'.
content
Add more examples to support your points, and try to explain why having more police helps reduce crime.
structure
Create a strong conclusion that sums up your ideas and restates your opinion clearly.
content
You provide a personal experience that makes your argument relatable.
coherence
The essay follows a logical flow from introduction to examples.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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