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The table shows key data on the demographics of four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows key data on the demographics of four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides key information about four populations of different
countries
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 , which are
China
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,
Russia
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, the
USA
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 and the
UK
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that these communities are the most
or
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apply
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the
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famous
countries
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 that have many
people
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 in the world, the figures for
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China
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the Chinese
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 population section were dominant ,
also
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 being the largest numbers in the population sector.
In addition
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, the
USA
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 come after
China
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 in population with 318,875,000
people
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,
whereas
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Russia
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 and the
UK
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 have the lowest number, they have a few and the lowest
people
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 compared to
China
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 or even the
USA
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.
According to
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 what is shown, the approximately age
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 life in
China
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 and the
UK
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 is the largest, which means these
countries
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 have many old
people
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,
while
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 the rest
countries
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 , which are
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USA
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the USA
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 and
Russia
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 the reverse they have a few old
people
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. In terms of local income per person, the
USA
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 and
UK
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 are paid a lot of money, 53,681 and 41,787
respectively
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, which means these
countries
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 are richer than
China
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 and
Russia
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, china, russia, usa, uk, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic metrics
  • age distribution
  • urbanization levels
  • population growth rates
  • life expectancy
  • birth rates
  • immigration policies
  • economic development
  • geographical size
  • historical factors
  • health care systems
  • infrastructure
  • quality of life
  • proportion
  • population size
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